Aquaria Wikipedia entry

[PresN]

Hi, I'm an editor at Wikipedia, and I decided to write/expand the entry for Aquaria there, as I love the game (bought the soundtrack, and I'm loving it too). I just wrote out a plot summary for the article, but as it's been a while since I played the game, I think I messed it up a bit. Since presumably the people who post here (especially Alec) know the plot better than I do, can anybody see anything that I got wrong/missed? I want to keep the plot section about as long as it is now, but I'm not adverse to adding more information or even completely rewriting it if necessary to make it make sense. Thank you!

Wikipedia article: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Aquaria_(video_game)

[Alphasoldier]

The plot was written very nicely, only few things I was able to pick out was:
"The only limiting factor is physical limitations such as areas accessible only by small passages, requiring the player to gain the fish form before entering."
This sentence gives sort of spoilers and I think it would sound better if you stayed a bit mysterious by saying something like "getting past a certain obstacle with a certain form you need to find."

Second, the kid/creator only remember the verse of the lullaby.

Finally, if I remember correctly, after the creator has been destroyed a lot of the civilisations came back, but I'd have to finish the game again to see it once more and be sure.

Oh and there's one small typo in the last sentence.

[Align]

There's no telling if the civilisations come back, the four souls being brought back to life was a bit ambiguous. I can't think of a reason to show them if they'll just go on to be alone, but it could just be me missing something major.

[PresN]

Thank you very much!

[Align]

Looks nice, although I'm not sure about mentioning the Dual Form outside of the plot (Li spoilers and all that).
But, I don't remember Mia taking Naijas child, only Naija herself... in fact, doesn't her child (Lucien) come after her in that flying contraption?

[Mortimer]

Good job, although I think it should have a warning since there's so many spoilers.

[Alphasoldier]

Just for you Align, I just finished the game again.

After Eric's explanation of his life you can see not only the four lost souls return, but with the Erulean spirit you also see two other come back, now I don't know if that's because of the creator or because of the spirit, but he's certainly not alone.

And yeah, the plot has a lot of spoilers.

[Xiagan]

Didn't we have a wikipedia/spoiler discussion 1-2 years ago?

[Mortimer]

I wasn't around 
I'll search the forums though

[PresN]

The plot section does have spoilers, but that's why it's called "plot". Without them, it would just say "Naija does a whole lot of swimming".  I'm trying to keep plot details out of the rest of the article, though Li creeps into the Gameplay section with the Dual Form. In the end, though, if you don't want to know anything about a game past the title screen, you probably shouldn't read an encyclopedia article about it, whose purpose is after all to inform.

Alpha- is Align right? Does Mia kidnap Naija or her child? I don't have my saves any more, and I just started a run-through so it would take a while to check myself.

[Alec]

Not to sound rude, but I'm a little bit frustrated with people writing "authoritative" articles on the game's story without fully understanding it.

Let me rant about mobygames.com for a second:

This is the worst offender: http://www.mobygames.com/game/aquaria
The character at the beginning is a young boy, who eventually becomes the creator - its not Naija!
Its so incredibly lame that a boiler plate description for a game would try to spoil the plot while simultaneously getting it completely wrong.

[Alec]

But back to wikipedia, I'm not sure where you get Mia stealing Naija's child from?

The extra ending ends with Naija and Li's son going after her.

There was also a line of dialog cut from the game from the perspective of Lucien (the son), talking about his intentions and reiterating dialog from the beginning of the game in an interesting way. (implying that the story might continue with him as the main character / narrator)

In any case, I appreciate the effort to maintain and update the Wikipedia page, I just get a bit frustrated when people post their subjective impressions of something as objective truth.

[PresN]

"Naija lives in a city on a rock floating high in the sky" -  haha, I had to stop right there. I figured I had the ending wrong- I played the game a year ago, and the visuals and atmosphere stuck with me more than the plot. Thus, why I asked here, as I figured you and the people here would know a heck of a lot more about the plot than I would. It is a little embarrassing to have completely screwed up the ending though...

[PresN]

Oh yeah, and if there's anything else you think I got wrong, please tell me- you are the authoritative source, after all. http://stats.grok.se/en/200911/Aquaria_%28video_game%29 - about 70 people a day read that article, so I'd really prefer for it not to misrepresent your story.

[Alec]

Thus, why I asked here, as I figured you and the people here would know a heck of a lot more about the plot than I would. It is a little embarrassing to have completely screwed up the ending though...

No biggie, I think the game is vague enough that it makes for differing interpretations.